Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
view it at
davebbq.com

Let me know what you think.
Dave

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive.
> You can view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave


It's all good except the change in the last paragraph on "origins". You go
from Dave to David.

Other than that, no fault.


TFM®

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive.
> You can view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave


It's all good except the change in the last paragraph on "origins". You go
from Dave to David.

Other than that, no fault.


TFM®

Dave Bugg wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave
>
>
ok, I'll have a half slab, beans and creamy slaw. Wait, NO BEER??!??
Just kiddin'.

The site looks good. In addition to TFM's comment about Dave/David
(with which I agree) you may want to consider adding a small
description of what the "Hey, I want it all" combo includes.
Personally, I'd add unsweetened Iced Tea too. Not everyone likes the
Sweet Tea. After you open, it may be nice to add a pic page and show
people some of your wares. Pics are worth a thousand words.

All in all though looks like a good start to me.

--
Steve

If the speed of lightis 186,000 miles/sec., what's the speed of
darkness?

Dave Bugg wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave
>
>
ok, I'll have a half slab, beans and creamy slaw. Wait, NO BEER??!??
Just kiddin'.

The site looks good. In addition to TFM's comment about Dave/David
(with which I agree) you may want to consider adding a small
description of what the "Hey, I want it all" combo includes.
Personally, I'd add unsweetened Iced Tea too. Not everyone likes the
Sweet Tea. After you open, it may be nice to add a pic page and show
people some of your wares. Pics are worth a thousand words.

All in all though looks like a good start to me.

--
Steve

If the speed of lightis 186,000 miles/sec., what's the speed of
darkness?

Dave Bugg wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave
>
>
ok, I'll have a half slab, beans and creamy slaw. Wait, NO BEER??!??
Just kiddin'.

The site looks good. In addition to TFM's comment about Dave/David
(with which I agree) you may want to consider adding a small
description of what the "Hey, I want it all" combo includes.
Personally, I'd add unsweetened Iced Tea too. Not everyone likes the
Sweet Tea. After you open, it may be nice to add a pic page and show
people some of your wares. Pics are worth a thousand words.

All in all though looks like a good start to me.

--
Steve

If the speed of lightis 186,000 miles/sec., what's the speed of
darkness?

Dave Bugg wrote in alt.food.barbecue

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You
> can view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave
>
>

Looks good Dave, maybe some pics of your good grub
later on might be an idea.

--
BigDog
To E-mail me, you know what to do.

Dave Bugg wrote in alt.food.barbecue

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You
> can view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave
>
>

Looks good Dave, maybe some pics of your good grub
later on might be an idea.

--
BigDog
To E-mail me, you know what to do.

Dave Bugg wrote in alt.food.barbecue

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You
> can view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave
>
>

Looks good Dave, maybe some pics of your good grub
later on might be an idea.

--
BigDog
To E-mail me, you know what to do.

"Dave Bugg" <deebuggatcharterdotnet> wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave

Australia needs a restaurant like this!

gtoomey

"Dave Bugg" <deebuggatcharterdotnet> wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave

Australia needs a restaurant like this!

gtoomey

"Dave Bugg" <deebuggatcharterdotnet> wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave

Australia needs a restaurant like this!

gtoomey

Gregory Toomey wrote:

> Australia needs a restaurant like this!

Greg, when you get ready, give me a holler and we'll partner a bbq joint
downunder. We can't leave you guys hangin' :-)
Dave

Gregory Toomey wrote:

> Australia needs a restaurant like this!

Greg, when you get ready, give me a holler and we'll partner a bbq joint
downunder. We can't leave you guys hangin' :-)
Dave

Dave Bugg wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.

Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo contest
for the ABF'ers.

You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
"Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of peach
however it's made!

--
Saara

Dave Bugg wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.

Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo contest
for the ABF'ers.

You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
"Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of peach
however it's made!

--
Saara

Dave Bugg wrote:

> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.

Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo contest
for the ABF'ers.

You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
"Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of peach
however it's made!

--
Saara

On Tue, 7 Sep 2004 13:47:21 -0700, "Dave Bugg"
<deebuggatcharterdotnet> wrote:

>Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
>view it at davebbq.com

A good start, Dave. I took the liberty of editing the text for you,
mostly for grammatical correctness and consistency. Here's the edited
text, followed by some general comments. My comments on the edited
text are in brackets.

[Home page:]

Meat-eaters will weep with joy. Vegetarians will wail and moan from
utter distress.

Our pork, beef, ribs, sausage, and chicken are slowly cooked--smoked
over hardwood logs and coals for the long hours that it takes to turn
meat into the most tender, moist, and flavorful mouthful of goodness
you've had the pleasure to wrap your lips around.

[I changed "mouth" to "lips." It didn't make sense to me to wrap my
mouth around a mouthful.]

Flavored by the pleasant tang of real hardwood smoke, along with dry
rubs of special spice mixtures, our melt-in-your-mouth barbecue will
keep you coming back for more.

[I deleted "the" before "dry rubs." I could explain why, but just
trust me.]

[Origins]

Dave has specialized in cooking Southern-style barbecue for the past
18 years. To him, creating authentic Barbecue is just as specialized
as cooking French, Chinese, or Italian cuisines.

During the past six years, Dave has traveled extensively into North
Carolina, South Carolina, Georgia, Tennessee, Missouri, Florida,
Alabama, New Mexico, Texas, and Oklahoma, examining the cooking styles
and operations of many, many popular BBQ joints, spending from one day
to one week in the kitchens and around the barbecue pits of those
joints.

Over the last four years, Dave has puzzled over the lack of any type
of barbecue restaurant in the Wenatchee area.

In 2002, Dave decided that he was going to take his expertise and love
of barbecue and open up his own joint, "Dave's Pit-Smoked Bar-B-Que,"
basing it on the successful joints he has frequented. Two years later,
his store opened on October 16.

Dave is experienced in kitchen and barbecue production, quality
control, inventory management, and food safety standards. He has also
catered barbecue for several large events over the last two years.
Best of all, Dave knows Southern-style BBQ!

[I tightened up the passage above, corrected a couple of typos, and
added some missing commas.]

Other comments:
1. Consider adding a mailto: link on the contact page. I don't like
filling out a web form just to e-mail someone.

2. On the home page, the font size changes in the phrase "This is REAL
barbecue. The real deal."

3. The text is fully justified on the home page and the origins page,
causing weird huge ugly spaces between words. Set
it to left-justified.

4. When you get time, I suggest that you replace the image of the menu
with HTML.

5. Photos, photos, photos--but get them done by a pro or a talented
amateur.

--
Kevin S. Wilson
Tech Writer at a University Somewhere in Idaho
"Anything, when cooked in large enough batches, will be vile."
--Dag Right-square-bracket-gren, in alt.religion.kibology

On Tue, 7 Sep 2004 13:47:21 -0700, "Dave Bugg"
<deebuggatcharterdotnet> wrote:

>Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
>view it at davebbq.com

A good start, Dave. I took the liberty of editing the text for you,
mostly for grammatical correctness and consistency. Here's the edited
text, followed by some general comments. My comments on the edited
text are in brackets.

[Home page:]

Meat-eaters will weep with joy. Vegetarians will wail and moan from
utter distress.

Our pork, beef, ribs, sausage, and chicken are slowly cooked--smoked
over hardwood logs and coals for the long hours that it takes to turn
meat into the most tender, moist, and flavorful mouthful of goodness
you've had the pleasure to wrap your lips around.

[I changed "mouth" to "lips." It didn't make sense to me to wrap my
mouth around a mouthful.]

Flavored by the pleasant tang of real hardwood smoke, along with dry
rubs of special spice mixtures, our melt-in-your-mouth barbecue will
keep you coming back for more.

[I deleted "the" before "dry rubs." I could explain why, but just
trust me.]

[Origins]

Dave has specialized in cooking Southern-style barbecue for the past
18 years. To him, creating authentic Barbecue is just as specialized
as cooking French, Chinese, or Italian cuisines.

During the past six years, Dave has traveled extensively into North
Carolina, South Carolina, Georgia, Tennessee, Missouri, Florida,
Alabama, New Mexico, Texas, and Oklahoma, examining the cooking styles
and operations of many, many popular BBQ joints, spending from one day
to one week in the kitchens and around the barbecue pits of those
joints.

Over the last four years, Dave has puzzled over the lack of any type
of barbecue restaurant in the Wenatchee area.

In 2002, Dave decided that he was going to take his expertise and love
of barbecue and open up his own joint, "Dave's Pit-Smoked Bar-B-Que,"
basing it on the successful joints he has frequented. Two years later,
his store opened on October 16.

Dave is experienced in kitchen and barbecue production, quality
control, inventory management, and food safety standards. He has also
catered barbecue for several large events over the last two years.
Best of all, Dave knows Southern-style BBQ!

[I tightened up the passage above, corrected a couple of typos, and
added some missing commas.]

Other comments:
1. Consider adding a mailto: link on the contact page. I don't like
filling out a web form just to e-mail someone.

2. On the home page, the font size changes in the phrase "This is REAL
barbecue. The real deal."

3. The text is fully justified on the home page and the origins page,
causing weird huge ugly spaces between words. Set
it to left-justified.

4. When you get time, I suggest that you replace the image of the menu
with HTML.

5. Photos, photos, photos--but get them done by a pro or a talented
amateur.

--
Kevin S. Wilson
Tech Writer at a University Somewhere in Idaho
"Anything, when cooked in large enough batches, will be vile."
--Dag Right-square-bracket-gren, in alt.religion.kibology

"sedge laptop" > wrote in message
news:v%q%c.5642$5Y6.4373@trnddc07
|| Dave Bugg wrote:
||
||| Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive.
||| You can view it at
||| davebbq.com
|||
||| Let me know what you think.
||
|| Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo
|| contest for the ABF'ers.
||
|| You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
|| "Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
|| pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of
|| peach however it's made!
||
|| --
|| Saara

Being from the South I'm just hoping he didn't mean *****ant* pie <g>

JD

"sedge laptop" > wrote in message
news:v%q%c.5642$5Y6.4373@trnddc07
|| Dave Bugg wrote:
||
||| Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive.
||| You can view it at
||| davebbq.com
|||
||| Let me know what you think.
||
|| Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo
|| contest for the ABF'ers.
||
|| You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
|| "Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
|| pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of
|| peach however it's made!
||
|| --
|| Saara

Being from the South I'm just hoping he didn't mean *****ant* pie <g>

JD

> Dave Bugg wrote:
>
>> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive.
>> You can view it at
>> davebbq.com
>>

Good news is: Yahoo finds your website
http://search.yahoo.com/search?p=www...om&fr=ieas-dns
Bad news is : Isn't up at the moment.

Dave, it would be a nice thing for a proper link like www.davebbq.com so we
dont have to cut n paste.



--

> Dave Bugg wrote:
>
>> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive.
>> You can view it at
>> davebbq.com
>>

Good news is: Yahoo finds your website
http://search.yahoo.com/search?p=www...om&fr=ieas-dns
Bad news is : Isn't up at the moment.

Dave, it would be a nice thing for a proper link like www.davebbq.com so we
dont have to cut n paste.



--

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Gregory Toomey wrote:
>
>> Australia needs a restaurant like this!
>
> Greg, when you get ready, give me a holler and we'll partner a bbq joint
> downunder. We can't leave you guys hangin' :-)
> Dave

Can I run it?
;-)

BOB

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Gregory Toomey wrote:
>
>> Australia needs a restaurant like this!
>
> Greg, when you get ready, give me a holler and we'll partner a bbq joint
> downunder. We can't leave you guys hangin' :-)
> Dave

Can I run it?
;-)

BOB

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Gregory Toomey wrote:
>
>> Australia needs a restaurant like this!
>
> Greg, when you get ready, give me a holler and we'll partner a bbq joint
> downunder. We can't leave you guys hangin' :-)
> Dave

Can I run it?
;-)

BOB

Duwop wrote:

> Dave, it would be a nice thing for a proper link like www.davebbq.com
> so we dont have to cut n paste.

Yer absolutely right :-) Thanks for the reminder.

Duwop wrote:

> Dave, it would be a nice thing for a proper link like www.davebbq.com
> so we dont have to cut n paste.

Yer absolutely right :-) Thanks for the reminder.

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave

We need PICTURES!

Oh, I forgot, yer not open yet. Guess this is what threw me:
"His store was opened on October 16, 2004."

LOL, I guess it isn't *quite* ready to be open for public "consumption" yet.

Looks good, Dave.

BOB
Fosco and Saara and Nikki all need to take cameras to the grand opening

Dave Bugg wrote:
> Well, I finally got something arranged, but it's pretty primitive. You can
> view it at
> davebbq.com
>
> Let me know what you think.
> Dave

We need PICTURES!

Oh, I forgot, yer not open yet. Guess this is what threw me:
"His store was opened on October 16, 2004."

LOL, I guess it isn't *quite* ready to be open for public "consumption" yet.

Looks good, Dave.

BOB
Fosco and Saara and Nikki all need to take cameras to the grand opening

sedge laptop wrote:

> Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo
> contest for the ABF'ers.

There you go.... great idea.

> You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
> "Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
> pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of peach
> however it's made!

Exactly the same thing.... maybe I'll change it to "rustic". I'll get that
danged banana spelled right, too. Thanks, SL.
Dave

sedge laptop wrote:

> Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo
> contest for the ABF'ers.

There you go.... great idea.

> You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
> "Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
> pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of peach
> however it's made!

Exactly the same thing.... maybe I'll change it to "rustic". I'll get that
danged banana spelled right, too. Thanks, SL.
Dave

sedge laptop wrote:

> Good start, Dave! Can't wait to see pics. You could have a photo
> contest for the ABF'ers.

There you go.... great idea.

> You have a couple of misspellings in your menu though. "Banana" and
> "Peasant". I don't know what a peasant pie is, but I've made "rustic"
> pies which is freeform without the pie pan. I'll take a slice of peach
> however it's made!

Exactly the same thing.... maybe I'll change it to "rustic". I'll get that
danged banana spelled right, too. Thanks, SL.
Dave

Kevin S. Wilson wrote:

> A good start, Dave. I took the liberty of editing the text for you,
> mostly for grammatical correctness and consistency. Here's the edited
> text, followed by some general comments. My comments on the edited
> text are in brackets.

Terrific, Kevin. I really appreciate your taking the time to help.
Dave

Kevin S. Wilson wrote:

> A good start, Dave. I took the liberty of editing the text for you,
> mostly for grammatical correctness and consistency. Here's the edited
> text, followed by some general comments. My comments on the edited
> text are in brackets.

Terrific, Kevin. I really appreciate your taking the time to help.
Dave

"Kevin S. Wilson" > wrote in message
...

I concur with everything Kevin said.

What are you, Kevin? Some kinda technical writer ;-).

John in Austin

Congrats on your great progress, Dave.

"Kevin S. Wilson" > wrote in message
...

I concur with everything Kevin said.

What are you, Kevin? Some kinda technical writer ;-).

John in Austin

Congrats on your great progress, Dave.

BOB wrote:

> Oh, I forgot, yer not open yet. Guess this is what threw me:
> "His store was opened on October 16, 2004."
>
> LOL, I guess it isn't *quite* ready to be open for public
> "consumption" yet.
>
> Looks good, Dave.

Thanks, Bob. I have to say that I am pretty confident of the October 16
prediction :-)

BOB wrote:

> Oh, I forgot, yer not open yet. Guess this is what threw me:
> "His store was opened on October 16, 2004."
>
> LOL, I guess it isn't *quite* ready to be open for public
> "consumption" yet.
>
> Looks good, Dave.

Thanks, Bob. I have to say that I am pretty confident of the October 16
prediction :-)

BOB wrote:

> Oh, I forgot, yer not open yet. Guess this is what threw me:
> "His store was opened on October 16, 2004."
>
> LOL, I guess it isn't *quite* ready to be open for public
> "consumption" yet.
>
> Looks good, Dave.

Thanks, Bob. I have to say that I am pretty confident of the October 16
prediction :-)