On 24/01/2015 7:54 AM, Kalmia wrote:
> On Thursday, January 22, 2015 at 3:21:33 PM UTC-5, Bryan-TGWWW wrote:
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> Certainly, any man's man, any guy who
>> likes movies with car chases and explosions, and who, if they'd been dragged
>> by the wife/GF to see The Fault In Our Stars, and would rather have a root
>> canal than sit through that again would hate it.
>
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> I would hate to try to diagram that sentence. Kind of fractured, huh? IF that's the style of your book...........AAAGGH.
>
I must admit, I would find myself tripping over the fractured grammar
and thus be unable to get immersed in the storyline. I do tutoring for
PhD students and I always get them to break up convoluted sentences like
that. I feel that writers must set standards.

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Xeno.